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The chart below shows the changes in the percentage of households with cars in one European country between 1971 and 2001. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the changes in the percentage of households with cars in one European country between 1971 and 2001. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart exemplifies the variation in the portion of
household
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households
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 with cars in European
country
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countries
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 throughout 4 decades from 1971 to 2001.
Overall
, the most obvious
pieces
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piece
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 of evidence is that the percentage of
home
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homes
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 with no
car
 has recorded a steady decline in number throughout
th
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the
 time frame.
To begin
 with, the amount of
residence
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 that had no
car
 in 1971 had demonstrated the highest peak of approximately 50%.
However
, the populace that had
atleast
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at least
one
car
 comprised
at
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35% which differs by almost 20%
with
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 the
one
 that
has
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two
car
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cars
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.
In addition
, the proportion of people who have none,
one
 or
two
 amounted to 42%,31% and 28% respectively in 1981. After 10 years,the share of
household
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households
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 who did not afford to buy a
car
 accounted for 30%.The percentage
differences
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difference
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 between
them that
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those who
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 have
one
 or
two
car
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cars
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 was around 4%.
Lastly
,
at the end
 of the period,the chunk of
residence
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 who
has
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had
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 none and
two
 4 wheel
vehicle
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vehicles
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 stood at the same level which at 30%. The percentage of
homestad
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homestays
 who owned a
car
 comprised
at
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nearly 42%.
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