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The plans below show the site of an airport now and how it will look after redevelopment next ye ar. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The changes that the
airport
 is set to undergo in the coming year are depicted in the provided layouts.
Overall
, it is evident that the
airport
’s site will undergo a significant transformation by the next year, with the most notable change being the addition of several gates on the northernmost part. The current layout of the
airport
 takes on a cylindrical shape. There are eight gates surrounding the square-shaped chamber of the northern walkway. On the departure side, security and
passport
control
 are situated. Just below the
passport
control
, in the right corner, a café is available. Check-in is located on the left of the departure site. In the subsequent year, the
airport
’s plan will experience sweeping alterations. A
Y shaped
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 area is expected to be developed on the northern part of the
airport
, surrounded by 18 gates with sky trains in the middle. Shops are anticipated to be constructed above security and
passport
control
. The café will be replaced with check-in, and a new facility named bag drop will be added to the former location of check-in. On the arrival site of the future
airport
,
passport
control
 customs will remain unchanged.
However
, a completely new café, ATM, and car hire services will be extended on the right side of the arrival section.
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Try to use varied vocabulary and more complex sentence structures to improve the overall quality of the writing. This can help enhance both Task Achievement and Coherence and Cohesion.
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Ensure your introduction clearly introduces the topic and your conclusion effectively summarizes the main points. This can improve the structure of the essay.
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Using more specific data or figures from the provided plans (if applicable) might strengthen the task response.
task achievement
The essay provides a clear comparison between the current and future designs of the airport.
task achievement
The main features and changes of the airport are well identified and described.
coherence cohesion
The logical structure of the essay is good, and ideas are logically connected.

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