Some people believe that cell phones should be for personal use only. others however feel cell phone should be used mostly for work. discuss both views and give your opinion.

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These days, mobile
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become an integral part of our lives and people generally, use
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for personal
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professional work. Our dependence on it
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increased many folds.
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, it is difficult to say which use is ideal personal or professional.
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a balanced view on
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notion and reasons to support my stance are elaborated in the following paragraphs
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that your introduction clearly outlines the specific points you will discuss in your essay. This helps readers anticipate the structure and flow of your argument.
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Make sure to provide specific examples or explanations that support each of your viewpoints. This will strengthen your argument and make your essay more persuasive.
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Your introduction sets up the discussion by highlighting the widespread use of mobile phones for both personal and professional purposes.
coherence cohesion
Your writing flows logically, indicating a balanced view on the topic.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • work-life balance
  • productivity
  • remote working
  • communication
  • access to information
  • privacy
  • leisure
  • social connections
  • personal development
  • educational apps
  • guidelines
  • regulating
  • managing cell phone usage
  • blurring the lines
  • employers' role
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