The charts summarise the weight measurements of people living in Charlestown in 1955 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar charts compare the
weight
measurements of people
living in Charlestown in 1955 and 2015.
It is clear that
in both
years
, most people
20 to 29 years
old maintained an ideal weight
, while
the percentages of people
from 50 to 69 years
were more obese. In 1955, a bigger percentage
of people
of all ages were underweight
than in 2015, where the
bigger Correct article usage
a
percentage
of people
across the age
groups were obese.
In both
years
, people
in 40
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the 40
age
groups had bigger percentages of obesity; in 1955, 5-10% of these people
were obese and in 2015, 25-60% of these people
were obese. 0-10% of younger people
were obese both
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in both
years
. 20-40-year
-old people
were more likely to be at an ideal weight
both
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in both
years
; for example
, 70% of these people
in 1955 and 2015 were at an ideal weight
.
In 2015, obesity dominated the chart over all age
ranges. It started from 2% of 20 to 29-year
-olds, followed by 10% of 30-to-39
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30-to-39-year-old
year
old people
. In addition
, 25% of 40 to 49
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49-year-olds
year
olds, 51% of 50 to 59
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59-year-olds
year
olds and the highest percentage
with 60% of 60 to 69
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69-year-olds
year
olds who
suffered from obesity. Correct pronoun usage
apply
However
, in 1955, only 5-9% of people
in all age
groups were obese. In 1955, there were bigger percentages of people
who were underweight
. Every age
group had at least 15% of people
underweight
. In 2015, only one group had a bigger percentage
of underweight
people
, 20%, and that was people
from 20-29.Submitted by jessica.pastor.87 on
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