The charts summarise the weight measurements of people living in Charlestown in 1955 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts summarise the weight measurements of people living in Charlestown in 1955 and 2015.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar charts compare the
weight
measurements of
people
living in Charlestown in 1955 and 2015.
It is clear that
in
both
years
, most
people
20 to 29
years
old maintained an ideal
weight
,
while
the percentages of
people
from 50 to 69
years
were more obese. In 1955, a bigger
percentage
of
people
of all ages were
underweight
than in 2015, where
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bigger
percentage
of
people
across the
age
groups were obese. In
both
years
,
people
in
40
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the 40
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-69
age
groups had bigger percentages of obesity; in 1955, 5-10% of these
people
were obese and in 2015, 25-60% of these
people
were obese. 0-10% of younger
people
were obese
both
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years
. 20-40-
year
-old
people
were more likely to be at an ideal
weight
both
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years
;
for example
, 70% of these
people
in 1955 and 2015 were at an ideal
weight
. In 2015, obesity dominated the chart over all
age
ranges. It started from 2% of 20 to 29-
year
-olds, followed by 10% of
30-to-39
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30-to-39-year-old
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year
old
people
.
In addition
, 25% of 40 to
49
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49-year-olds
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year
olds, 51% of 50 to
59
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59-year-olds
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year
olds and the highest
percentage
with 60% of 60 to
69
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69-year-olds
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year
olds
who
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suffered from obesity.
However
, in 1955, only 5-9% of
people
in all
age
groups were obese. In 1955, there were bigger percentages of
people
who were
underweight
. Every
age
group had at least 15% of
people
underweight
. In 2015, only one group had a bigger
percentage
of
underweight
people
, 20%, and that was
people
from 20-29.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 86%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words weight, people, both, years, percentage, underweight, age, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 7 times.
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