The chart below shows the percentage of people born in and outside of Australia living in cities, towns, and rural areas in 1950 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features of the graph and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the percentage of people born in and outside of Australia living in cities, towns, and rural areas in 1950 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features of the graph and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar graph illustrates the rate of Australian citizens who
had
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born
out
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and
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in their country and had been living in
cities
,
towns
, and rural
areas
between 1950 and 2021
Overall
,
it is clear that
the ratio of new-born
people
who were born in Australia and outside Australia preferred
cities
more than
towns
and rural
areas
in both years.
According to
the given data, in 1950, the presidents who chose to live in
cities
considered the highest residents about 60% outside and 98% inside
while
40% and 25 had lived in rural
areas
.
Additionally
, it was just 10% of new birth
people
interested in
towns
.
On the other hand
, in 2021, individuals were keen on
cities
as the top significant place to start their life with 80% and over 60% of
people
born outside and inside the country. (respectively).
Moreover
, the rate of residents in the country living in
towns
and rural
areas
was the same
about
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approximately 18%
While
outside the number of
people
decreased slightly.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words cities, towns, areas, people with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.

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