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The table below shows the worldwide market share of the notebook computer market for manufacturers in the years 2006 and 2007 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the worldwide market share of the notebook computer market for manufacturers in the years 2006 and 2007 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table
illustrate
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 the
number of
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worldwide
market
share
 of the notebook
comyouter
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computer
market
 for manufacturers from 2006 to 2007.
Overall
, it can be clearly seen that HP
company
 had the highest
proportation
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proportion
 during the three years.
Homever
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However
, Fujitsu was seen
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 lowest in all time
of
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period. Observing the chart in more detail, HP
in
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had the largest
number of
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market
share
2014
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in 2014
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 with around 34.25.
Moreover
, the
proprotion
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proportion
 of
market
share
 in Dell
company
 was double
of
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the figure in Samsuning
company
 in 2007 accounting ground for ar 20.2 and about 10.7 respectively.
In contrast
, the
number of
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market
share
in
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Toshiba
company
 8.12 which was
fewer
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lower
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 than the
number
 of other
company
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companies
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 in 2006
with
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at
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 roughly 22.8. One
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striking piece
 of information to be noticed
that
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 both
company
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companies
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 of
levnovo
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 in 2006 and 2007
have
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had
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 an equal amount
approximately
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of approximately
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 6.7.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, market, share, company with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • market share
  • percentage points
  • market presence
  • ranking
  • market leader
  • least market share
  • total market share
  • market consolidation
  • market diversification
  • new entrants
  • exits
  • highlight
  • compare
  • decline
  • increase
  • improvement
  • loss of ground
  • manufacturer
  • worldwide
  • notebook computer
  • notable
  • significant
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