The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The table shows information about the sources of
police
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the police
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budget
, and the pie charts compare how the money was spent respectively between 2017 and 2018 in a specific area of Britain.
It is clear that
most of the money came from
national
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the national
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government in both
year
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years
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. At the same time, money was distributed mostly to salaries for officers and staff. There are 2 main sources
contributed
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that contributed
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to the police
budget
, with the significantly highest amount provided
from
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by
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national
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the national
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government, which
is
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was
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175.5m in 2017 and 177.8m in 2018.
Following
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Followed
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by local taxes with 91.2m in 2017 and a
slightly increased
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in 2018 to 102.3m, and other sources,
such
as grants, remained
in
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at
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a stable amount
about
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of about
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38m in the two years.
On the other hand
, the
budget
was spent on 3 aspects. Among those figures, salaries accounted for the largest proportion in both
year
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years
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, which was approximately
three-fourth
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three-fourths
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of the total spending.
While
technology was the only
the
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apply
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distribution which increased
6
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by 6
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% (from 8% to 14%), the
budget
for buildings and transport remained the same (17%) in 2017 and 2018.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fiscal allocations
  • Revenue streams
  • Budgetary oversight
  • Expenditure
  • Financial appropriation
  • Government grants
  • Local taxation
  • Operational costs
  • Capital investment
  • Public safety
  • Crime prevention
  • Community policing
  • Resource allocation
  • Year-on-year comparison
  • Budgetary constraints
  • Fiscal year
  • Fund disbursement
  • Budget deficit/surplus
  • Trend analysis
  • Financial sustainability
  • Law enforcement funding
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