The graph below shows China's population by age group starting in 1960 and including a forecast to 2050.

The graph below shows China's population by age group starting in 1960 and including a forecast to 2050.
The line graph below illustrates the population of China by age group with a range of years 1960 and 2050.
Overall
, the two figures increased and decreased consistently.
Whereas
the third figure fluctuated. The number of teenagers and adults persons jumped dramatically until 2020.
However
, people expect that their percentage will decrease from 70% to slightly more than 50%. Vice versa trend was with kids. Their percentage dropped until 2020 and had approximately 22% in 2020.
Furthermore
, the prediction was that they will continue to fall and will be exactly 17,5% in 2050.
Finally
, the
last
figure is the old people who are more than 65 ages. They are the most noticeable figure because their amount is lowest in the 3 categories of the group. More precisely, their percentage was just around 5% in 1960.
However
,
due to
their proportion increasing consistently, The people expect that their proportion in 2040 and 2050 will be around 20% and 25% respectively.
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