The chart below gives information on the number of workers in different occupations who migrated to Australia betwween 2009 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information on the number of workers in different occupations who migrated to Australia betwween 2009 and 2012.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The presented bar chart compares data about the figure of people who work in 4 various categories and emigrated to Australia from 2009 to 2012 per thousand workers.
Overall
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, it was important that Accountant had the highest number
instead
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of the Computer programmers.
According to
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the diagram, At the start, Accountant, the main career that foreign populations did, reached 20;
then
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it climbed significantly and touched the vertex at 28;
however
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, its trend reduced moderately to 21 in 2012. The second item that was most popular was Software engineer. It hit 19 in 2009;
thereafter
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, its fashion jumped slightly and peaked at 21 in 2011;
nevertheless
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,
finally
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, its amount was 4 fall. The graph demonstrates that Cook's direction fluctuated between 15 to 18 owing to the fact that it was 17 in 2009 after that it hit the nadir at 15 in 2010;
then
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in 2011 it reached the maximum at 18;
moreover
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, in 2012 it was 16. The
last
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item was computer programming, which improved over the period of 3 years. In the beginning, it was 2
then
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it hit 4 in 2010;
although
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, it went down to the number that was same as in 2009, and in 2012 it leapt to the highest mark at 5.
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