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Writing Samples
Band 5.5

A friend you made while you were studying abroad has written to ask you for help in finding a job in your country. You have heard about a job in a local company that might be suitable for him/her. Write a letter to this friend. In your letter tell your friend about the job and what sort of work it involves say why you think the job would be suitable for him/her explain how to apply for the job

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Dear Ali
Ewas
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Was
 so glad when ii heard you
are
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 coming
in
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 my country, and was I not only happy, but
also
 more eager to see you after 5 years.
Any way
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, as you are
fining
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finding
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 a good job in Iran ,you asked me about
this
 issue in your
last
 letter ,
ihave
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I have
have
 a
grate
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 suggestion for you. I would
like
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 inform you that one of the most famous
company
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 in our area is hiring some new force workers
according
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 the technical parts of their factory. Their payment is enough for dealing with your life and their work time is 7 hours per day. Since you are interested
on
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 technical work and you have a lot of talent in
this
 field, It is so really
suite
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suited
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 for your character.
An
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 the other hand if you agree with my advice, I can give an application from them, so I will send
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for
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 you. ,
therefore
 you can fill
in
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 and return
to
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 me or send
to
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 them directly
..
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Ihope
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I hope
 they accept your
apply
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, and we can meet another after several years .Let me know if you have any
question
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. Best wishes Ali Saremi
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grammar
There are a few grammatical errors and typos, such as "Ewas" instead of "I was," "fining" instead of "finding," "grate" instead of "great," and "suite" instead of "suit." Pay attention to these small errors as they can slightly affect the clarity of your letter.
cohesion
Using more transition words and phrases can help smooth the flow between ideas and paragraphs.
structure
Your letter is structured nicely with a clear introduction, body, and conclusion.
tone
The tone of the letter is friendly and appropriate for the context, maintaining a balance between formality and friendliness.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • reputation
  • industry
  • duties and responsibilities
  • typical day
  • skills and experiences
  • job requirements
  • company culture
  • personality
  • work ethic
  • application process
  • job listing
  • submit an application
  • documents required
  • tailored resume
  • cover letter
  • relevant experiences
  • reviewing documents
  • practicing for interviews
  • promptly
  • deadlines
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