The charts below show the average percentage in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of whicg may be unhealthy if easten too much, Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.
We humans need nutrients for our
body
. It helps us stay strong and healthy Fix the agreement mistake
bodies
however
it may be unhealthy to consume too much Linking Words
of
Change preposition
apply
sodium
, saturated fats, and added sugars. Use synonyms
Usually
these are what we find in an average meal of an American diet.
In breakfast, as it turned out Add a comma
Usually,
sodium
had the Use synonyms
least
Correct word choice
lowest
percentage
Use synonyms
while
added Linking Words
sugar
and saturated fat had the same number. In lunch Use synonyms
Linking Words
however
Add a comma
however,
sodium
has the biggest Use synonyms
percentage
Use synonyms
while
saturated fat has 26% and added Linking Words
sugar
Use synonyms
being
the smallest has 19%. In dinner, Wrong verb form
is
sodium
won again by having the highest Use synonyms
percentage
meanwhile saturated fat Use synonyms
have
37% and added Verb problem
was
sugar
Use synonyms
having
only 23%. In snacks, added Verb problem
was
sugar
Use synonyms
have
a really high Change the verb form
has
percentage
, and saturated fats Use synonyms
being
the lowest.
In conclusion, we found out that Wrong verb form
are
sodium
had the most in dinner and added Use synonyms
sugar
Use synonyms
having
the most in snacks.Wrong verb form
had
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