The bar chart shows the percentage of adult male smokers in seven countries along with the world average in 2000 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart exemplifies the proportion of adult
smokers
among men in seven different countries together with
the world average in the year
2000 and 2015.
Fix the agreement mistake
years
Overall
,it is evident that 6 states witnessed a decline in shares and the remaining countries saw a surge in percentage
.
To begin
with, the world's average male smokers
decreased steadily, reaching around 30% in 2015.Over the period,Amenia and Bangladesh demonstrated a similar trend with an initial value above 60%.However
,the proportion of the male population in Bangladesh who smoke had significantly declined by roughly 20% compared to Amenia with just around 10
% difference.Correct article usage
a 10
In addition
,despite Egypt and Lebanon stood
at around the same shares at the beginning of the period,the chunks of male Wrong verb form
standing
smokers
in Egypt was slightly higher than in Lebanon amounting to half of the male population
Other than that,Cuba maintained a consistently low percentage
of male smokers
with little variation between two years.Although
Mexico and Australia begin at around the same percentage
which just
about one-third ,Mexico experienced a higher drop in Add a missing verb
is just
percentage
compared to AustraliaSubmitted by alisyashazzy on
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