It is observed that in many countries not enough students are choosing to study science as a subject. What are the causes? And what will be the effects on society? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from own knowledge or experience.

There is a current distressing situation that in most
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countries not enough
students
are choosing to study
science
as a subject. In fact, it has reached an alarming situation. The following paragraphs
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highlight various aspects of
this
menace and propose a handful of remedial measures. There are myriad reasons which trigger the issue and even make it worse. One of the main causes of the problem is the lack of practical
knowledge
.
For example
, a survey conducted by Oxford
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found that most of the
students
who were from
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background
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practical
knowledge
.
Therefore
, having practical
knowledge
is extremely crucial for
students
. The solution is that provide motivational
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in every
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.  Shifting towards another problem is that difficult to handle
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life style
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.
This
is to say in
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contemporary era established
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variety of technology which is common
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these days so it is important to have
knowledge
about it.
For instance
, our grandparents were totally unaware
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new technology like smartphones and
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it leads to
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uncomfortable lifestyle. To
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this
issues
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, scientific
knowledge
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for all children.
Hence
,
science
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the
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vital role in
these era
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.   In conclusion,
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because of not choosing
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subject
students
suffer from uncomfortable
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lifestyles
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and lack of practical
knowledge
yet
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it
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can be solved by conducting motivational
program
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • STEM (Science, Technology, Engineering, Math)
  • Perception of difficulty
  • Early exposure
  • Engaging experiences
  • Career opportunities
  • Practical applications
  • Financial constraints
  • Cultural norms
  • Critical fields
  • Innovation
  • Economic development
  • Global competitiveness
  • Public health
  • Environmental issues
  • Scientific progress
  • Educational standards
  • Biodiversity loss
  • Healthcare services
  • Medical research
  • Job prospects
  • Research and technology
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