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A friend of yours is going on holiday soon and has asked you to recommend a destination. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: Recommend a good place for a holiday that you have visited Describe where you stayed and what you can do there Provide one negative aspect about the destination Write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear ___,

#friend #holiday #destination #place #aspect #addresses #___
Hello Abdullah, How are you? I’m doing great! Because I’m on holiday in Spain
this
 month.
This
 country is amazing. Our hotel is fantastic and comfortable. I’m here with my best friend Asil. The food is very delicious and gourmet. I like Espeto. Asil loves soup. We like all the restaurants at the hotel. Spain is a wonderful and interesting city. The weather is cool. All the buildings are modern and very big. The shops are good and affordable.
This
 is the most fantastic holiday of my life. Spain is great. Goodbye! See you soon, Islam
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Task Response
The letter provides a personal recommendation but lacks detail about where exactly you stayed and what activities you can do there. Consider adding such details for clarity.
Coherence and Cohesion
Try to organize the letter into clear paragraphs. For instance, one paragraph could be about the accommodation, another about food and activities, and another about any negatives or other interesting facts.
Greeting and Closing
The letter starts with a friendly greeting and ends with a warm closing, which is suitable for the task.
Suitable Writing Tone
The tone of the letter is informal and friendly, which appropriately matches the task requirements of writing to a friend.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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