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The diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured.

The diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured.
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The following picture illustrates the process of producing instant
noodle
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noodles
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.
This
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 process consists of 8 stages, starting with storing flour in storage silos.
Firstly
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, flour is transported to huge storage silos to be stored.
Then
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, the flour is mixed with water and oil, using a specific mixer. Mixing these three main ingredients forms
dough
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. From stage 3 to 5, the shape of the
dough
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 changes 3 times, becoming primarily
dough
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 sheets ,
secondly
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dough
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 strips and
finally
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 noodles discs. Once the noodle discs are cooked in a large frye, they are
dryed
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dried
 to be put in
especial
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special
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 cups. In the 7th stage, vegetables and spices are added to noodle cups. In the
last
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 stage, When the cups are labelled and sealed, they are ready to be sold in the market.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words dough with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • manufacturing process
  • mixing ingredients
  • dough preparation
  • sheeting
  • steaming
  • cutting techniques
  • dehydration
  • deep-frying
  • cooling system
  • packaging
  • quality control
  • production line
  • mass production
  • food preservation
  • convenience food
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