The pie charts below describe the online shopping sales for retail sectors in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Pie charts
depicts
Change the verb form
depict
sales
in onling
Correct your spelling
online
shop
by retail sectors in New Zealand between 2003 and 2013. Fix the agreement mistake
shops
Overall
, travel
takes the big part
of sales
while
books
takes
the Change the verb form
take
less
percentage, hen Correct word choice
lowest
books
slightly decreased and travel
dropped, meanwhile
Add a comma
meanwhile,
film
and music
increased.
In 2003 travel
take
the main Wrong verb form
took
part
of chart
Correct article usage
the chart
win
36% but in 2013 it decreased to 29%. Wrong verb form
winning
Books
takes
the Change the verb form
take
less
Correct your spelling
lowest
part
of me
chart mir 19%, and increased in 2013 Correct pronoun usage
my
with
22% Change preposition
to
film
and music
was
21 percent in 2003, but in 2013 Correct subject-verb agreement
were
it
increased to 33% Meanwhile, clothes decreased from 24% in 2003 to 16% in 2013.
Online Correct pronoun usage
they
sales
for retail sectors in New Zealand in 2003 illustrates
that Correct subject-verb agreement
illustrate
the
most Correct article usage
apply
part
of sales
comes to Correct article usage
the sales
travel
, meanwhile
Add a comma
meanwhile,
books
is
less. Change the verb form
are
film
and Music
has 21% ha while
clothes 24%. However
in 2013 There Add a comma
However,
was
big changes Change the verb form
were
film
and music
became the most of
Change preposition
on
chart
meanwhile clothes the less.Correct article usage
the chart
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sales, travel, part, books, film, music with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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