The table below gives information about students studying in six departments in an Australian university in 2011.

The table below gives information about students studying in six departments in an Australian university in 2011.
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The table illustrates data about
students
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in Australia in 2009.
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,
most
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the most
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preferred departments by international
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were physics and information technology.
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addition
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female
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females
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were dominant in studying humanities, education, science and physics. At first
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72%
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of
humanities
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were females which was the highest one among all
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,20%
people
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from abroad and
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the other
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12%
student’s
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language was not
english
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English
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.
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of women and international
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in
education
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the education
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faculty was quite close to humanities at 68% and 23% respectively.
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who were not native English speakers, most preferred science and IT at 45% and 49% respectively.
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, in
IT
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the IT
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and Engineering
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women showed
lowest
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the lowest
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results.
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