The table below gives information about students studying in six departments in an Australian university in 2011.
The table illustrates data about
students
in Australia in 2009.
Overall
, most
preferred departments by international Correct article usage
the most
students
were physics and information technology. In
addition
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addition,
female
were dominant in studying humanities, education, science and physics.
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females
glance
72% Add a comma
glance,
students
of humanities
were females which was the highest one among all Change preposition
in humanities
students
,20% people
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were people
other
12% Correct article usage
the other
student’s
language was not Change preposition
of student’s
english
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English
Number
of women and international Change the article
A number
The number
students
in education
faculty was quite close to humanities at 68% and 23% respectively.
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the education
According to
what is shown, students
who were not native English speakers, most preferred science and IT at 45% and 49% respectively.
Furthermore
, in IT
and Engineering Correct article usage
the IT
spheres
women showed Add a comma
spheres,
lowest
results.Correct article usage
the lowest
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