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The table below gives information about students studying in six departments in an Australian university in 2011.

The table below gives information about students studying in six departments in an Australian university in 2011.
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The table illustrates data about
students
 in Australia in 2009.
Overall
,
most
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the most
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 preferred departments by international
students
 were physics and information technology.
In
addition
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female
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females
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 were dominant in studying humanities, education, science and physics. At first
glance
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glance,
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 72%
students
 of
humanities
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in humanities
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 were females which was the highest one among all
students
,20%
people
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were people
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 from abroad and
other
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the other
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 12%
student’s
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of student’s
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 language was not
english
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English
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.
Number
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A number
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 of women and international
students
 in
education
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the education
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 faculty was quite close to humanities at 68% and 23% respectively.
According to
 what is shown,
students
 who were not native English speakers, most preferred science and IT at 45% and 49% respectively.
Furthermore
, in
IT
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the IT
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 and Engineering
spheres
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spheres,
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 women showed
lowest
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the lowest
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 results.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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