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The chart shows the proportion of renewable energy in total energy supply in 4 countries from 1997 to 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart shows the proportion of renewable energy in total energy supply in 4 countries from 1997 to 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart
illustrate
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 the proportion of power energy in
Australia
,
Sweden
,
Iceland
 and Turkey between 1997 and 2010. As can be seen,
Iceland
 has
get
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got
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a
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the
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 highest percentage of
renwable
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renewable
 energy.Will ,
Australia
 and
sweden
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Sweden
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 have nearly
same
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the same
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 and
Less
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fewer numbers
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number
.
It is clear that
,
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apply
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 In
Iceland
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Iceland,
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thir
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there
is
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it
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incresed
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increased
 in 2010
around
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by around
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 70%.
whill
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while
will
 in 2000 it decreased
in to
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into
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 60 %.
In addition
, In 1997 it
were
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was
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 power energy drop to 45%.
Moreover
, In
Turkey
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Turkey,
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thir
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their
 were increased around same
nerly
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nearly
 same
number
 over the years. The rising
were
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was
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 in 2000 around 40%
whill
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while
will
 in 1997 they were less
in
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by
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 one Point
nerly
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nearly
 39% .In 2010 start fell
in
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apply
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to 31%
On the other hand
, in
Austrailia
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Australia
 and
Sweden
 have the same
number
. In
Australia
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Australia,
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 In 1997 the
number of
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apply
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proportion
were
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was
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 less than 10% and through two years
droped
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dropped
 to
nerly
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barely
 1%.
However
, In
sweden
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Sweden
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were
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was
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proportion
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a proportion
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 in 1997
around
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was around
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 2% and
grow
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grew
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 to under 10%.
To sum up
, we could say that,
Iceland
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in Iceland
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thir
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their
were
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was
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 increased
overe
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over
 the years
while
 in
Australia
 were decreased.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words australia, sweden, iceland, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "proportion" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "drop" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
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