task1: the graph and table show the average monthly temperatures and the average number of hours of sunshine per year un three major cities

task1: the graph and table show the average monthly temperatures and the average number of hours of sunshine per year un three major cities
The graph and table
are illustrating
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illustrate
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the
varies
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variations
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of
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temperature
throughout the year and the number of
hours
of sunshine
among
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in
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three cities respectively. As
it is
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shown by
graph
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the graph
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, The
temperature
in London and New York has
quite
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similar pattern. The
temperature
is lowest in the beginning and the end of the year in those two cities,
which
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with
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the
temperature
approximately 5 to 10 degrees Celsius in January and December. The trend increases from April and
hit
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the peak
to
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July, which
estimates
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to
25
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to 30 degrees Celsius.
On the contrary
, Sydney shows
the
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difference
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trend, where
highest
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the highest
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temperature
is in January and December and the lowest
temperature
is
lowest
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in July. It’s clear from the table that sunshine
hours
both in New York and Sydney are nearly equal, having daytime 2535 and 2473
hours
per year, respectively.
On the other hand
, London has sunshine
hours
just
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of just
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about 1180
hour
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hours
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which is the lowest compared to those cities
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Contractions: Don't use contractions.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words temperature, hours with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.

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