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The pie chart below show the percentages of waster used in different sectors in Sydney,Australia in 1997 and 2007

The pie chart below show the percentages of waster used in different sectors in Sydney,Australia in 1997 and 2007
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The given pie charts compare the various purposes of
water
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usage
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 in Sydney and Australia over the period of 1997 and 2007.
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it is clear that
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 a large percentage of
water
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 was used in the food
industry
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 and households,
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 the smallest amounts were used in building and manufacturing. As the chart reveals, in 1997, the greatest proportion of
water
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usage
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 was in the food
industry
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 at 48%, which decreased steadily to 41% in 2007.
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,
water
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usage
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 in the service
industry
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 was 26% in 2007, which was twice as high compared to 13% in 1997. Turning to the smallest figure, it was in the building
industry
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, at just 5% in 1997, which decreased to 2% in 2007.
Water
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usage
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 in households remained approximately the same at 19% and 21% in 1997 and 2007, respectively.
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, there was little change in manufacturing, which was at 15% in 1997 and dropped sharply to 11% in 2007. I corrected grammar, spelling, and punctuation errors for clarity and readability
while
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 keeping the original meaning intact. Let me know if you'd like to adjust anything
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, usage, industry with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compare" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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