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Some people believe that vaping is a safer alternative to smoking and helps people quit smoking, while others think that e-cigarettes are harmful and may lead to vapers becoming smokers in the future. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #alternative #e-cigarettes #vapers #smokers #future
These days,
people
 are smoking
cigrate
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citrate
migrate
cigarette
along with
vape
. But what is the most effective method for dealing with
vipe
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pipe
vape
vibe
 and cigarettes becoming
smoker
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a smoker
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.
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?
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 Some
people
 believe that
the
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apply
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Vaping are not
harmfull
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harmful
 as
compare
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compared
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 to cigarettes. In
this
essay
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essay,
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 I will discuss both sides of the
arguments
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argument
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 and draw a conclusion. First of all,
people
thinks
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think
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 that vaping is safer, with vaping
people
 think they end the smoking
habbit
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habit
.
For example
, most
of
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apply
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the
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apply
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human
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humans
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 start vaping when they come to quit
the
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apply
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smoking they don't,
for ending
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 the smoking
habbit
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habit
 they start vaping. If they
not
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do not
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 quit
taking
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smoking
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cigerate
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cigarettes
smoke
then
there
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their
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boday
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bodies
 soon or later will cause different
type
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types
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 of
deases
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diseases
. So
people
 think
usess
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uses
 of vapes
are
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is
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 far better
then
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than
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smoke
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smoking
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cigeratte
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cigarette
cigarettes
.
On the other hand
, there are common
beliefe
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belief
believe
beliefs
 that in
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the upcoming
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upcoming
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coming
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 days
people
are
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will be
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 more
addict
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addicted
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of
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to
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cigarette
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cigarettes
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due to
 much
use
 of vapes.
For instance
, when they
use
e-cigarette
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e-cigarettes
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 there focus on
to leave
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leaving
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 the addiction
of
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to
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tambacco
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tobacco
cigarette
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cigarettes
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 but some time of starting
vape
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vaping
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 the
addict
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addicted
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of
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to
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 vaping and take much more and more to inhale the
vape
smoke
.
As a result
, their health low or low day by day
due to
high
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the high
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 amount of
use
 the vaping. In conclusion,
although
 it is
common
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a common
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 thought that
people
 believe and think that vaping are
good
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a good
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 alternative to
guiet
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get
 the
smoke
. I believe that
for
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apply
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leaving the
cigeratte
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cigarette
habbit
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habit
 for
intence
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intense
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 to
use
 the
vape
 is not good. Personally, I think vaping
are
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is
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 much safer
then
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than
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cigeratte
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cigarette
cigarettes
 because they have no tobacco,
vape
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Vaping
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are
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is
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comming
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common
 in different
type
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types
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 of
flovour
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tobacco
use
 that as
compare
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compared
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 the
cigeratte
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cigarettes
.
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