On one hand, nuclear power provides cheap and clean energy. On the other hand, nuclear weapons are a potent threat to world peace. Do the benefits of nuclear technology outweigh the risks? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Nuclear
energy
has become a prominent type of
energy
among the other forms. Some people argue that nuclear
power
provides benefits to
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humanity
such
as inexpensive and clean
energy
,
while
others believe that it
has
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more risk to the
world
. In my opinion,
risks
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associate
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with nuclear
power
are more as compared to the benefits. On the one hand, there are several benefits of
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nuclear
power
such
as affordability and quality. As the population is
inceasing
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increasing
day by day around the
world
, the regular forms of
energy
such
as wind and electric
energy
have been diminishing at an alarming rate;
therefore
, there is an immediate need
of
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new
form
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forms
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of
energies
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energy
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such
as nuclear and wind
energy
.
For instance
, countries with
high
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rate of population are researching the efficient form of
energies
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energy
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so that they do not have to rely on the natural form of
power
. On the other side of
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, everything has its own cons and
pro
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pros
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; so, nuclear
energy
also
has various
drwabacks
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drawbacks
such
as
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a threat
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threat
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threats
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to the
world
. Nuclear
energy
can be used to assemble
the
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atomic or nuclear bombs which, in turn, can
distroy
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destroy
the whole planet.
In other words
, as soon as
world
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is progressing towards high population and prosperity, nations are developing
the
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nuclear bombs in order to enhance their inner strength.
Therefore
, countries with
nuclear
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bomb
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bombs
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can
threat
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their
neighbour
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nation in order to
fullfil
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fulfil
their demands related to
memerships
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memberships
membership
and missions.
For example
, the US has nuclear
bomb
sites all around the
world
so it can be
threat
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to entire worlds if the US decide to
laucnh
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launch
the
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nuclear
bomb
.
Thus
, the command over the threatening
bomb
can be
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to the
world
.
To sum up
,
while
nuclear
power
has some advantages
such
as cheap
energy
, in my opinion, it has more
threat
to the
worls
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world
such
as nuclear
bomb
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bombs
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.
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Language
Pay closer attention to spelling and typographical errors, such as 'inceasing' and 'distruct' (should be 'increasing' and 'destroy').
Coherence & Cohesion
The essay presents a clear opinion that the risks of nuclear power outweigh the benefits, which is maintained throughout the text.
Task Achievement
The introduction effectively outlines the debate around nuclear power and states the writer's stance.
Coherence & Cohesion
The essay uses an appropriate structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
Task Achievement
Some examples are given to support points, such as the mention of countries in search of efficient energy forms and the US's nuclear power.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Nuclear power
  • Cheap and clean energy
  • Nuclear weapons
  • Threat to world peace
  • Benefits
  • Risks
  • Potent threat
  • Deterrence
  • Security
  • Accidents
  • Disasters
  • Misuse
  • Balancing
  • Strict regulations
  • International cooperation
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