Some people believe that advertisements aimed at children should be banned. Others argue that advertisements have a positive impact on children. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

There is an ongoing debate

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advertisements aimed at

children

need to be prohibited.

While

the opponents of

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statement believe that

commercials

have a positive influence

to

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on

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children

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children's

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mindset

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, others argue that it is more beneficial for

children

to not

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exposed

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to

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them at all. I personally agree

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the latter argument and I will elaborate more on

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essay. People who believe that

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advertisements

purposed

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at

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children

need to be banned have several reasons.

Firstly

, most

of

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children

are unable to process

information

comprehensively, and thereby they will receive all

commercials

without filtering.

For example

, many milk

commercials

in Indonesia claim to be healthy

products

,

whereas

, in fact, there is much sugar

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on

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it

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.

Secondly

, the main goal of advertisement is to gain profit. As

this

industry will generate every possible way to attract

children

to

buying

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their

products

, it does not matter

for

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to

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them whether the

products

are truly beneficial for the target.

For instance

, fast food restaurants offer bonus toys for

children

who dine at their place.

Therefore

,

while

the company has reached their goal, the

children

need to deal with future

effect

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effects

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in terms of health quality.

Conversely

, individuals who argue that

commercials

have

positive

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a positive

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impact on

children

see other points of view. They tend to believe that an advertisement always

have

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a potential resource to

exposure

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much knowledge on

children

. Take a

kids

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kid's

kids'

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sportwear

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sportswear

commercial

for instance

, it offers

information

on how

excercise

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exercise

could be fun and interesting.

Furthermore

, a commercial can be

such

a reminder for

children

. Nowadays many colorful ads featured with healthy kids

products

expose the disadvantages of smartphone overuse by the

children

.

As a result

, it can be

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impactful strategy for

children

who are glued to

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technology.

However

, these impacts are not significant to the

children

without parents'

guideline

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guidelines

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. In conclusion,

while

it is believed that advertisements have a big leverage to deliver much beneficial

information

for

children

, I strongly affirm that

commercials

will

cause

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a bad influence

due to

inability of the

children

to filter

information

.

Furthermore

, the ultimate purpose of

company

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is solely profit for them.