The graph below shows average carbon dioxide emossion per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy, Portugal between 1967 and 2007

The graph below shows average carbon dioxide emossion per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy, Portugal between 1967 and 2007
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of carbon dioxide substance per individual in three countries from 1967 to 2007.
Overall
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United
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Kingdom and
Sweden
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was
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two states that produced significant
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this
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hazardous pollution in
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of average,
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gradually becoming even better
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end
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of the period.
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the other two, which is Italy and Portugal experienced
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the opposite
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trend.
United
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the most
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countries
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average
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of
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carbon dioxide but experienced decreasing over
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time. United Kingdom
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the top producer at around 11 metric
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approximately
9 metric
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in
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the end of
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. On the other side,
Sweden
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was the second largest contributor at around 9 metric
tonnes
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but ultimately
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to rank three to over 5 metric
tonnes
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pattern can be seen in two other countries which had low
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amount
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of that type of toxic chemical gases. Over the period, individuals in Portugal
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the least contributor of non-ecosystem friendly
substance
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substances
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, which started at merely 1 metric
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tonnes
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per person and witnessed
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trend to the same position as
Sweden
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at approximately over 5 metric
tonnes
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Coversely
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,
Italia
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ranking was above Portugal all the time with around 5 metric
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each
at
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1967. Unfortunately,
this
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country
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in considerable amount until it reached
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the second
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position of all in 2007
to
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nearly 8 metric
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each.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sweden, tonnes with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remain" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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