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The map below shows the development of the village of Ryemouth between 1995 and present. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The map below shows the development of the village of Ryemouth between 1995 and present. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The map illustrates the main changes which happened in the village of Ryemouth from 1995 to
present
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the present
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. In general, the increased number of housing and apartments in the Ryemouth indicates
growing
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a growing
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 population over the period. In 1995, there
were
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was
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a
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apply
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housing in the
north-corner
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north corner
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 and no changing location of the houses happened to the present. Raising
number
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a number
the number
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 of housing
from
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in
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 the past was significant.
Additionally
, the Farmland and the Forest
park
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Park
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 had changed into health facilities, the golf and the tennis building. The major changes
also
 occurred to the shop. In the current condition, the restaurant take over the shop places, indicating
transformation
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a transformation
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 from
village
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a village
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 to
suburban
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a suburban
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 landscape.
In
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At
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the
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apply
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present,
hotel
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the hotel
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did
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has
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improvement
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improved
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 through a car park.
Furthermore
, across the
street
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street,
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 the café still
exist
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exists
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 in front of the hotel. There are apartments beside the café that took over
fish
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the fish
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 market
on
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in
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the
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apply
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1995.
This
 development impacted on
disappearing
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disappearance
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 of fishing
port
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ports
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.
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Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • development
  • village
  • Ryemouth
  • 1995
  • present
  • houses
  • small school
  • residential areas
  • amenities
  • population
  • increased
  • growth
  • expansion
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