Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

People
have different views on whether
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our daily activities environments,
such
as
work
or school be competitive, or
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whether we
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should try to help each other and be more cooperative towards our colleagues or classmates. I would argue that,
although
competition
has its own advantages
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being able to cooperate well with each other is indeed,
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essential in
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life.
One
major advantage of
cooperation
is that it would result in much more desired
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outcomes
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in
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period of time.
In other words
, when a group of
people
are working on a project, some novel ideas of several creative minds are discussed in a group of
people
each with a specific skill or talent so, it is most likely that the best idea is going to be implemented.
For example
, for developing a web application all
designer
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designers
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, back-end
developer
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developers
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, front-end
developer
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developers
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and project
manager
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managers
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should
work
togther
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together
because all of them have different insights regarding
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their own field of expertise which is going to be useful in both
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and
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implementation
phase
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.
Addtionally
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Additionally
, it fosters a sense of responsibility for each individual in the team because they don't
one
to be the burden
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the team who
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the
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efforts.
Furthermore
, nowadays we can see that companies
rather
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to hire
people
with good teamwork
skills
. They've realised that an individual who has better soft
skills
and can
work
with
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/his coworkers has more benefits compared to the
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geniuses
genius
who
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alone. So, in today's
world
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the
imporantce
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importance
of
cooperation
is well-known and the outcome of teamwork is way better than individual
work
.
On the other hand
,
competition
gives
people
a motive to develop their
skills
and better themselves.
For instance
, in Iran university entrance exam is
one
of the biggest competitions each student
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and
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students for
this
final exam, regular simulation exams are taken
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them
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and schools put high pressure on them
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more to get a lower rank.
However
, I tend to believe
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affects
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of
such
competitions outweigh
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advantages, because
people
may sacrifice a lot of things that are vital for a healthy life
such
as hanging with friends or doing exercise to focus on their
work
or studying, which eventually would result in depression and physical health issues. So, competitions may force
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individual to improve herself but if it isn't controlled it can result in mental and physical health
crisis
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. In conclusion,
people
would argue that
wich
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one
is more beneficial
competition
or
cooperation
. In my opinion,
competition
can persuade
people
to
imporve
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improve
themselves, but it can have negative effects in
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term
,
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if it isn't controlled.
However
,
cooperation
would result in a way better outcome,
due to
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of different
skills
and
intellact
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intellect
minds
along
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leading to individual growth for all team members.
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coherence cohesion
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