Modern technology is now very common in most work places. How do you think this has changed the way we work? Do you think there are disadvantages tp relying too much on technology

Digital technology played
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Ensure that your introduction provides a clear overview of the points you plan to discuss. In this essay, the introduction lacks a clear thesis statement that outlines the main points of discussion.
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Use linking words and phrases to connect ideas smoothly throughout the essay. This will help in achieving a more logical flow.
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Include specific examples to support your arguments. Currently, the essay lacks specific details which could strengthen the points being made.
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The introduction attempts to set the context by mentioning the role of digital technology in changing workplace dynamics.
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The intention to discuss both advantages and disadvantages of technology in workplaces is clearly stated.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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