You recently went to a concert and thought one of the singers was very good. You want to fell him how you feel. Write a letter to the singer. In your letter • say how you feel about his performance • give details of your musical activities • explain how you would like him to help you with your musical activities
Dear Alex
Tam writing to tell you l attended
in
your concert Change preposition
apply
last
week and, really I was excited when I watch
your performance in Wrong verb form
watched
the
front of me. Adding that, I did not Correct article usage
apply
believed
that a local performance be so beautiful . I would like to say that night I was overwhelmed with Change the verb form
believe
happy
Replace the word
happiness
from
your smooth Change preposition
by
voice
. Really, I was enchanting to meet you. I can say your voice
is one of the most pleasant voice
in our country.
I would like to tell you l am Change to a plural noun
voices
a
amateur singer and Change the article
an
i
started Change the capitalization
I
from
8 years ago, sort of, I tried to learn Change preposition
apply
with
Change preposition
apply
my
Correct your spelling
by
self
. Correct your spelling
myself
Therefore
, I don't know my strong points and my weakness
Fix the agreement mistake
weaknesses
about
Change preposition
in
this
subject especially in my voice
ups and downs methods while
singing.
Can I aske
you to help me Correct your spelling
ask
asked
pleas
Correct your spelling
please
about resolving
Wrong verb form
resolve
this
matter It is clear I will pay for it in full according
your point. I look forward to Add the preposition
according to
reply
you as soon as possible Wrong verb form
replying to
i
would Change the capitalization
I
grateful
if you Add a missing verb
be grateful
inform
me.
Yours faithfully
Ali SaremiWrong verb form
informed
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coherence cohesion
To improve coherence and cohesion, ensure a logical structure by organizing information with clear transitions between ideas.
coherence cohesion
In discussing your musical activities, focus distinctly on what you've done and what assistance you need. Each paragraph should represent a single idea.
task achievement
Consider expanding on how the singer's performance specifically inspired or affected your subsequent actions to enhance task achievement.
coherence cohesion
Your closing and greeting are appropriately formal and effective for this letter format.
task achievement
You effectively communicated your admiration for the singer's performance, which aligns well with the task requirements.
task achievement
The writing tone is suitable and respectful, which complements your intent to seek assistance from the singer.