You recently went to a concert and thought one of the singers was very good. You want to fell him how you feel. Write a letter to the singer. In your letter • say how you feel about his performance • give details of your musical activities • explain how you would like him to help you with your musical activities

Dear Alex Tam writing to tell you l attended
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your concert
last
week and, really I was excited when I
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your performance in
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front of me. Adding that, I did not
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that a local performance be so beautiful . I would like to say that night I was overwhelmed with
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from
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your smooth
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. Really, I was enchanting to meet you. I can say your
voice
is one of the most pleasant
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in our country. I would like to tell you l am
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amateur singer and
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started
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8 years ago, sort of, I tried to learn
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my
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self
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.
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, I don't know my strong points and my
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about
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this
subject especially in my
voice
ups and downs methods
while
singing. Can I
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you to help me
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about resolving
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this
matter It is clear I will pay for it in full
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your point. I look forward to
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you as soon as possible
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me. Yours faithfully Ali Saremi
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coherence cohesion
To improve coherence and cohesion, ensure a logical structure by organizing information with clear transitions between ideas.
coherence cohesion
In discussing your musical activities, focus distinctly on what you've done and what assistance you need. Each paragraph should represent a single idea.
task achievement
Consider expanding on how the singer's performance specifically inspired or affected your subsequent actions to enhance task achievement.
coherence cohesion
Your closing and greeting are appropriately formal and effective for this letter format.
task achievement
You effectively communicated your admiration for the singer's performance, which aligns well with the task requirements.
task achievement
The writing tone is suitable and respectful, which complements your intent to seek assistance from the singer.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • stellar performance
  • captivating
  • musical prowess
  • talent
  • repertoire
  • collaboration
  • mentorship
  • resonate
  • aspiring musician
  • composition
  • rendition
  • inspirational
  • vocal range
  • harmonize
  • skillset
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