Countries around the world will be facing significant challenges related not only to the environment, but pollution and education as well. What problems your country will face in next years.

I live
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a
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extroordinary
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extraordinary
place in Kazakhstan called Aktau.Be known as a magnet to tourists, but at the same time for
a problems
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problems
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.It's a place near to
sea
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the sea
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and
main
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the main
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problems
comes
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from there.But all around my
country
faces
much
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many
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more difficulties and it's growing
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exponentially
exponentialy
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exponentially
In the past few
years
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years,
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there
was
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have been
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significant types of troubles in
ecomic
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economics
,
educaton
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education
and corruption.
Firstly
the education our children have and quality are growing much stronger but about 70
percent
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of them
are
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don't work
by
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in
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their
specialties
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specialities
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, that comes to us like low-qualified workers that can cause much more damage in future.Second is
econmic
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economic
, the rotation of
politicans
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politicians
are
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giving
a
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future prospects a place to share a hand but
high placed
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old school
residentes
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residents
distracts
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and
ties
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tie
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their hands.The purpose is to more likely to have their interest in
first,
do not
caring
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about
anothers
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others
.
Ofthenly
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Often
this
problem is not talked
and
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it's our
tradiotions
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traditions
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, everyone
know
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that
kazakhs
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are friendly, calm and
peacefull
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peaceful
folks, but we have
thing
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a thing
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called '
sheme
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scheme
',
be
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being
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ashamed of something or someone
are
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is
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killing a personality
oin
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in
growing
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a growing
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generation.And
lastly
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corruption, the definition of
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a challeng
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challeng
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challenge
to
country
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a country
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, as we know from the
last
years
from
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our national budget
stolen
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around 40
percent
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per cent
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or 100 or billions of
dollar
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. All problems that we
faced
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or going to face more likely would
comes
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come
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out of people being greedy. In a
country
that
have
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so much to do and grow
this
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the
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few main setbacks is doing job
stoping
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stopping
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this
country
grow and doing
their
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its
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job well.Facing them and
interrupt
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interrupting
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to solve
it
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them
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,
are
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not only
be
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the best option the strategy is to give a space, mentality and friendly atmosphere to the
peoples
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people
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.
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coherence cohesion
Organize your ideas using clear paragraphs for each main point to enhance the logical structure.
task achievement
Provide more specific and relevant examples to strengthen your arguments.
task achievement
Ensure that each point you make is fully developed with clear explanations.
task achievement
The essay touches on important challenges like education, economy, and corruption, demonstrating awareness of the country's issues.
coherence cohesion
The introduction presents the problem clearly, engaging the reader.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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