The table below gives information about the daily cost of water per person in five different countries. (Figures are based on the minimum daily requirement per peron of 11.5 litres.)
The chart below compares various regions of the world in terms of total daily
water
cost for one indivitual
.
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individual
Overall
, it is noticeable that people who live in Tanzania, use a big proportion of average daily human requirement
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requirements
by
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apply
whereas
americans
use the Change the capitalization
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least
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lowest
percentages
of their everyday needs.
A glance at the graph makes it clear that Pakistan is using 1.1 per cent of 11.5 litres which makes Fix the agreement mistake
percentage
int
only 0.1265 litres Correct your spelling
it
water
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of water
on the other
hand
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this
number in Tanzania is insanely 0.65 litres for each person in one day.
obviousely
, England Correct your spelling
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also
has a good average of
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water
using
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use
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of
whereas
, Uganda taked
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took
the
second place Correct article usage
apply
of
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in
most
use of Correct article usage
the most
water
between
all these five countries.Change preposition
among
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