The table below gives information about the daily cost of water per person in five different countries. (Figures are based on the minimum daily requirement per peron of 11.5 litres.)

The table below gives information about the daily cost of water per person in five different countries. (Figures are based on the minimum daily requirement per peron of 11.5 litres.)
The chart below compares various regions of the world in terms of total daily
water
cost for one
indivitual
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individual
.
Overall
, it is noticeable that people who live in Tanzania, use a big proportion of average daily human
requirement
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by
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5.7 per cent,
whereas
americans
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use the
least
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lowest
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percentages
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of their everyday needs. A glance at the graph makes it clear that Pakistan is using 1.1 per cent of 11.5 litres which makes
int
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it
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only 0.1265 litres
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per day,
on the other
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this
number in Tanzania is insanely 0.65 litres for each person in one day.
obviousely
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, England
also
has a good average
of
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water
using
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0.013 per cent
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, Uganda
taked
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the
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second place
of
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most
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the most
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use of
water
between
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all these five countries.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words water with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • daily cost
  • per person
  • minimum daily requirement
  • litres
  • comparison
  • assessment
  • analysis
  • evaluation
  • impact
  • citizens
  • relationship
  • availability
  • resources
  • measures
  • manage
  • implications
  • health
  • hygiene
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