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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graph shows Underground Station passenger numbers in London. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graph shows Underground Station passenger numbers in London. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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The
line
 graph provides information about how many people
uses
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use
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 the underground station passenger in
capital
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the capital
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 of the UK .
Overall
, as it is
obviously
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 from the
line
 graph there was fluctuation in
general
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the general
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 trend
in addition
 the highest number was in the morning
in contrast
 the lowest figure was in the afternoon. First of all, the first hour in the graph there
is
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apply
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increased sharply to
accounted
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 for 100 to 200
passengers
 from 6:00 a.
m
 to 7:00 a.
m
 and after that the time between 7:00 and 8:00 reach to the highest point to made by 400
passengers
subsequently
 the
line
 was dropped quickly to half
passengers
 to reach 200 users
then
 the
line
 is upward to reach in the afternoon just under 300 uses
moreover
 the
line
 touched 300
passengers
 at 14:00 p.
m
 and
the next step is
 the
line
 back to decreased quickly to the lowest number it that was 100
passengers
 after which the number of
passengers
 increased sharply between 17:00 p.
m
 and 18:00 p.
m
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words line, passengers, m with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 3 times.
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