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Band 5.5

in the future nobody will buy printed newpapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. to what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is believed that printed
newspapers
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books
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 will be put aside and
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,
people
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 will be reading everything online with no payment. I partly agree with
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 notion for some reasons which will be discussed in
this
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people
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 are able to access what they want through it. Information and data are updating at the speed of light nowadays.
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printed
newspapers
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 will be so
out-dated
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outdated
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 that
people
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 no longer read them anymore.
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everyday
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, new steps are made in scientific discoveries and it is impossible to talk about them in printed
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.
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, there is an essential advantage to
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online weblogs and magazines: online pages can be personalized
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readers'
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reader's
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preference
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preferences
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.
In contrast
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,
people
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 cannot change anything about old
paper
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books
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 and texts,
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 as font or
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color
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. It makes online pages something to welcome, compared to printed
paper
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 contexts.
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, printing
paper
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 materials like
books
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 costs so much.
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, printers and ink are consumed and trees should be cut down.
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 the awareness about the
presevation
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preservation
 of
environment
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 is rising,
people
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 tend to use online
books
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 and texts
instead
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 of
paper
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 ones to protect the environment.
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,
although
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people
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 will be able to read everything online, they have to pay for it. Online
pages'
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pages
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 employees like writers, photographers and graphic designers still need to be
payed
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paid
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. It is
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 assumed that as
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payment methods
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become
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 more advanced,
copyright
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copyrights
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 will be more difficult to
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 and
passed
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pass
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 in the future.
Consequently
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, online readers will be forced to pay for online contexts. In conclusion, it is true that in the future
people
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 will ignore printed
newspapers
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 and search and read what they need online, but like any other created content,
people
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 are expected to spend
mpney
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money
 for what they take advantage of.

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task achievement
You have addressed the question well and provided relevant points for both agreeing and disagreeing with the statement. However, some points could be expanded upon for more depth and clarity. Consider providing more examples and explanations for your points on why people might still choose printed materials.
coherence and cohesion
The essay structure is clear, with a defined introduction and conclusion. However, make sure each paragraph transitions smoothly into the next to enhance the flow. Minor refinements in paragraph linking could improve the essay's cohesion further.
coherence and cohesion
Try to avoid small grammar mistakes and typos, such as lower-casing proper nouns and missing punctuation. Re-reading the essay or running a spell-check before submission can help catch these issues.
coherence and cohesion
Your introduction effectively introduces the topic and your position, which is clear to the reader.
task achievement
The conclusion succinctly summarizes your main points and restates your position, effectively wrapping up the essay.
task achievement
You provide logical reasons and examples that support your arguments. This demonstrates an understanding of the topic and the ability to analyze both sides of the argument.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Technological advancements
  • digital media
  • environmental impact
  • sustainability
  • tactile experience
  • digital library
  • monetized content
  • online subscription
  • physical copies
  • digital divide
  • internet connectivity
  • decline in preference
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