The pie charts below show the frequency of snacking in children while playing electronic games. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The
given
pie charts provide information about the percentages of devices, used by individuals from Verb problem
apply
18
to 24 age group in Malaysia between 2009 and 2019.
Correct article usage
the 18
Overall
, the three devices (conventional TV
, laptop, and dekstop
computer) experienced a downward trend Correct your spelling
desktop
while
others (flat-screen TV
, mobile phone, and tablet) showed an upward trend throughout the period
. Although
conventional TV
had the highest user
, it was outraced by flat-screen Fix the agreement mistake
number of users
TV
Fix the agreement mistake
TVs
at the end
of the period
.
In 2009, conventional TV
accounted for 30% of the users,
and experienced Remove the comma
apply
more
than eightfold decrease to 4% in 2019. Correct article usage
a more
Similarly
, in 2009, laptop
and Fix the agreement mistake
laptops
dekstop
Correct your spelling
desktop
computer
comprised Fix the agreement mistake
computers
of
20% and 18% respectively, and both fell to 12% Change preposition
apply
at the end
of the period
.
On the other hand
, flat-screen TV
made up 8% in 2009, Fix the agreement mistake
TVs
it
experienced a significant increase to 27% in 2019. Correct pronoun usage
they
In addition
, at the begining
of the Correct your spelling
beginning
period
, mobile phone
, which accounted for 15%, Fix the agreement mistake
phones
risen
by 11% in 2019. There was a gradual increase from 5% in 2009Wrong verb form
rose
,
and continued to rise sharply, reaching 19% in 2019.Remove the comma
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "at the end".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words tv, period with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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