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The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use.

The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use.
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The first diagram depicts the percentage distribution of Australian household
energy
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 consumption and related
gas
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emissions
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 in six categories:
water
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 heating, refrigeration, heating, cooling, lighting, and other usages.
Overall
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, it is completely evident that
water
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 heating and heating utilized the highest
energy
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whereas
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water
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 heating and other appliances were on the top of the list of pollutant
gas
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 released. The first chart vividly demonstrates that heating accounted for the dominant
share
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 of
energy
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 consumption at 42%, nearly followed by
water
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 heating, which resulted in 30% of total consumption, covering more than 70%. Meanwhile, the remaining less than 30% was divided into four other sectors: other usages 15%, refrigeration 7%, and lighting 4%. Cooling recorded the lowest percentage of
energy
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 utilization, with only 2%. The second diagram is a detailed breakdown of
gas
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emissions
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 from different
energy
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-consuming activities. It shows that
water
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 heating had the highest
share
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 of
gas
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emissions
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, 32%, followed closely by other appliances, 28%.
In addition
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, refrigerating, heating, and lighting's
share
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 was 14%,15%, and 3%, respectively. Cooling, again had a modest percentage
share
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 of 3% for greenhouse
gas
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emissions
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, gas, emissions, water, share with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "diagram" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Energy consumption
  • Greenhouse gas emissions
  • Sustainable practices
  • Energy efficiency
  • Renewable energy
  • Fossil fuels
  • Carbon footprint
  • Eco-friendly appliances
  • Insulation
  • Solar panels
  • Recycling
  • Climate change
  • Kilowatt-hour (kWh)
  • Emissions-intensive
  • Energy audit
  • Smart meters
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