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The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed.

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed.
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The table and charts given below illustrate information on the police budget
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year between 2017 and 2018 in one area in Britain.
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, both the table and the charts relate to monetary issues, in terms of the source of
money
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 and its spending.
According to
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 the table which shows where the
money
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 came from
it is clear that
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 the total amount was lower in 2017 than in 2018, being responsible for 304.7m and 318.6m relatively. The
money
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 came from various sources including national government, local taxes and other sources (egg grants). The national government budget constituted 175.5m in 2017 and 177.8m in 2018. Local taxes were higher in 2018 and 2017, contained in terms 102.3m and 91.2m. The figures for other sources (egg grants) made stability throughout the year, accounting for 38m The two charts elaborate on the spending of
money
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 during a year. The
money
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 was spent on salaries between 2017 and 2018, accounting for 75 per
cent
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 and 69 per
cent
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 in terms. The expenses for buildings and transport were in the same range, 17
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per cent
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. The cost of technology was the lowest
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 the tables, constituting 8 per
cent
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 in 2017 and 14 per
cent
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 in 2018.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "according to".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 89%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words money, m, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • budget allocation
  • funding sources
  • government policies
  • economic conditions
  • community services
  • crime prevention
  • public safety
  • significant increase/decrease
  • distribution
  • assessment
  • reflection
  • allocation shifts
  • budget comparison
  • impact analysis
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