The map below is of the town of Canterbury. A new school (S) is planned for the area. The map shows two possible sites for the school. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The map illustrates the possible locations for a new school planning, marked as S1 and S2, in the town of Canterbury.
Overall
, it can be seen that S1 will be located in the countryside area, Linking Words
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S2 will be placed in the middle of the town centre. Linking Words
Furthermore
, both sites have the same distance to a university and each site features different advantages and drawbacks.
The first location is called S1 and will be located in the countryside area. As it will be placed at the side of the city, it will have better air quality which affect students' health. Linking Words
Moreover
, it is near the main roads to Sturry and adjacent to the residents' area. Linking Words
Additionally
, its distance to Sturry is 5 kilometres with a total population of 7,000 people. Linking Words
Then
there is a university on the northwest side. Linking Words
However
, its rural place may affect the availability of public transportation facilities.
Moving to the second site, S2 will be located in the town centre and fully surrounded by housing areas. As it is located in the centre of the city, there will be adequate public transportation and infrastructure facilities. Linking Words
In addition
, it will have direct access to the main roads and its distance to Chartan is 7 kilometres with a total population of 4,500 people. Linking Words
Then
there is a university on the north side. Linking Words
However
, there is no traffic zone there which may affect the students' safety.Linking Words
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