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The bar graph below shows the percentage growth in average property prices in three different countries between 2007 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar graph below shows the percentage growth in average property prices in three different countries between 2007 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given bar graph illustrates the growth in average
property
prices
 in three different countries in percentage between the
year
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years
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 2007 and 2010.
Overall
,
according to
 the bar graph, in Algeria, the average
property
prices
 decreases and in China, the
avarage
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average
property
prices
increases
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increase
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. In Argentina, the average
property
prices
fluctuates
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fluctuate
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 over the period. In Algeria, in 2007, the average
property
prices
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price
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 was 6% and it experienced
4.5
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a 4.5
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%
of
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decrease.
In addition
, in 2009 and 2010 the
prices
 of
property
 in Algeria decreased more
,
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 and
was
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were
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 almost the same, and it was around 3%.
On the contrary
, in China, the
prices
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price
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 of average
property
 was only 2%, and it increased gradually
througout
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throughout
 the period
,
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 and reached
at
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its peak at 6.6% in the year 2010.
Moreover
, Argentina shows 3.5% of
property
prices
 in the graph in 2007. It reached
at
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its peak in 2008 at around 4.5%.
Moreover
,
property
prices
 experienced the lowest in 2009 at around 1.2%. The next year, it experienced
slight
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a slight
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 increase which was around 2.5%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "moreover".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 83%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words property, prices with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreases" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increases" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
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