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The table below shows the results of surveys in 2005, 2010 and 2015 about McGill University. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The table below shows the results of surveys in 2005, 2010 and 2015 about McGill University. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The table chart gives information
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survey
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a survey
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 on different aspects
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 McGill University over a period of 10 years.
Overall
 , We
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observe
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 that student services witnessed the highest number, and had the
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diffrance
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difference
 between
years
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the years
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 2005 and 2010.
Whereas
, sports and social facilities stayed in
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constant
 over the period. To commence, the survey showed teaching quality in
this
 academy increased from 74 to 78,
whereas
 the results of library resources fluctuated,
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 with 86 to 88
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dropped
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 to 87.
Students
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 service experienced a dramatic increase from 54 to 81
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to 95. Regarding the other 2 types of information, the least feature is
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 of modules
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 decreased from 39 to 31
then
 reached 25.
lastly
, the outcome of sports and social facilities remained static the same over the given period.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "gives" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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