Many countries want to host international sports event, while other countries think that hosting sports event has more problems than benefits. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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modern era, many developing countries are indulging towards promoting

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few nations are proud to participate

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hosting global

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worldwide

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athletes

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inviting other international

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athletes

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authority

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however

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, sometimes it can be provided from other government incentives. Similary, with

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participants

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people

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and family

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get

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to show enthusiasm for cheering

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athelts which can

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relied upon

local

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hotels. Another central

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benefit

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international relationships with other developed cities. Take the example of

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time held by

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growth and cultural heritage with other

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matches can be tremendously beneficial for

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hand, hosting

inetrnational

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international

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required prodigious funds to improve

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facility with

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management to manage

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, to balance financial needs

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common

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requirements

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meetings

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contry

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country

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promoting

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first

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, it can create high population or congestion in cities leading to more traffic

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believe hosting

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sports

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event can be

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challenging

and demanding but it has more benefits as it

outweigh

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disadvantages.

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, there should be global cooperation from other

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to mitigate related concerns so it can promote

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athletes

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visitors

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grammar

Work on reducing grammatical and spelling errors to improve clarity. For instance, 'athlets' should be 'athletes', and 'goverment' should be 'government'. These mistakes can interrupt the flow of reading.

structure

Enhance the logical flow between arguments and paragraphs. Ensure that each paragraph supports a single, clear idea and that transitions between points and paragraphs are smooth and logical.

structure

Effective introduction and conclusion sections that provide a clear overview and summary of the discussion.

task response

The essay touches upon both sides of the argument, which is essential for a balanced discussion, thus fulfilling the task requirements.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

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