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Band 5

One problem faced by almost every large city is traffic congestion. What do you think the causes are? What solutions can you suggest?

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In recent times, opportunities and living in large
cities
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got
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have become
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 attractive and the number of
people
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 who
lives
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live
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 in large
cities
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 is rising all the time.
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However
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However,
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 these
cities
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 have problems and one of them is
traffic
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 congestion.
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 essay will look at the reason for
this
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 and propose some possible solutions. One of the main causes of the
problem
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 is that the number of vehicles is too large for
highways
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 and the
highways
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 are getting
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 by
people
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’s cars. A
soultion
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solution
 for the
government
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 is to
develope
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develop
 more modern
highways
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 and roads that are suitable for the number of vehicles that are used. Another
problem
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 is that many
people
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 prefer to use their own vehicles rather than public transport systems.
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 is because the cost of public
transports
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transport
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 are too much that it is not worth it for individuals to use them on
daily
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a daily
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 basis. To tackle
this
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problem
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government
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 should invest more in transportation systems in order to reduce the cost of using them for
people
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. A third cause of the
problem
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 is that
people
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are tend
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 to take their cars for even short trips that they can go by walk or bicycle.
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,
highyways
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highways
 are
get
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apply
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overload
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overloaded
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 and much more time will
waste
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be wasted
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 in
traffic
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. To deal with
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 issue
people
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 should start using public
transports
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transport
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 or bicycles for their short trips. In conclusion,
traffic
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 congestion is one of the main issues in
the
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apply
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large
cities
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 right now,
due to
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 reasons
such
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 as the cost of public transportation,
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highways
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highway
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 overload and
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people
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people's
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 habits.
This
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 is a serious
problem
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, and
government
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 must take
actions
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,
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otherwise
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otherwise,
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people
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 will suffer from
spendig
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spending
 hours in
traffic
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. In my
view
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view,
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 the main responsibility for solving the
problem
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 lies with the
government
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.

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task achievement
Try to include specific examples or case studies to strengthen your arguments, as this will demonstrate a deep understanding of the issue.
coherence cohesion
Ensure each main point is thoroughly supported with details and examples to enhance clarity and depth.
coherence cohesion
The essay contains a clear introduction and conclusion, presenting a structured argument throughout.
task achievement
You have effectively identified key causes and suggested concrete solutions, showing a good understanding of the topic.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • traffic congestion
  • urban population
  • public transportation
  • urban planning
  • infrastructure
  • economic strength
  • consumerism
  • car ownership
  • commuting
  • peak hours
  • public transit
  • carpooling
  • ride-sharing
  • remote work
  • flexible working hours
  • cycling infrastructure
  • congestion charges
  • traffic management systems
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