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The chart below shows the expenditure of two countries on consumer goods in 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the expenditure of two countries on consumer goods in 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart below illustrates the
consumble
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consumable
consumer
 goods
such
 as cars, computers, books ,
perfum
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perfume
perfumes
, and cameras in the
Uk
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UK
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 and
france
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France
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. we can notice that the
cultre
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culture
 has
huge
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a huge
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 impact on our daily life . First ,
Perfum
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perfume
sale
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sales
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is more
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are
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 higher in
france
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France
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 than Uk by around %10 .
Also
,
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the brtish
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brtish
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British
 love photos as per the chart and that's why we have much more cameras
sale
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on sale
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 in the UK . Cars , computers , and books are
almsot
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almost
same
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the same
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 in both countries where the United Kindom has
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a littler
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littler
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little
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 bit more
sale
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sales
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in
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of
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the
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apply
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books .  In the end , Both
countires
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countries
 have a lot of
comman
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common
 goods
consume
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consumed
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due to
near by
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nearby
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culture.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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