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Some people believe that reading is always a good habit. Others feel it depends on which books a person is reading. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

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Today, a contentious issue exists regarding the reading. It is thought by some
people
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 that reading is an excellent hobby for individuals,
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 others
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 that the
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 what a person's read are
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important. In
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To begin
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 reading habits is that it develops
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's general knowledge
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emphatizing
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.
Moreover
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, it accelerates reading speed and understanding talents of
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For
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On the other hand
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, reading and consuming every
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readable
 content have generally advantages
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 individuals though, there are numerous
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 on markets which are meaningless and waste of
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. These
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 are generally produced by publishing houses for their
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 purposes.
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, there are many
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 selling in many
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. Because of their content,
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 may not want to read them.
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, a lot of
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 do not have any interest
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 fantastic type
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. In my view, reading every type of
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 have generally its benefits,
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 you consume
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 an equally
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 role. The book choices are shaped by
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's pleasure and interests.
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,
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 should be more aware of
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some
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 have commercial concerns. In conclusion, reading
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,
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magazines
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,
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blogs etc. have their benefits, the contents of them
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 equally critical. The ultimate goal should be to strike a balance and
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 beneficial choices for individuals.
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coherence cohesion
Ensure you present clear topic sentences to guide the reader through your argument more effectively.
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Try to provide more specific examples to support your points, as this will help illustrate your arguments more clearly.
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Be mindful of grammatical errors and avoid them as much as possible to maintain clarity.
coherence cohesion
Your introduction and conclusion effectively introduce and wrap up the topic.
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You have managed to address both sides of the argument, demonstrating a balanced perspective.
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There is a good attempt to explore different aspects of reading, such as knowledge development and commercial concerns of publishers.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • mental stimulation
  • knowledge acquisition
  • vocabulary expansion
  • stress reduction
  • memory improvement
  • analytical thinking
  • empathy
  • emotional intelligence
  • social cues
  • constructive content
  • morally uplifting
  • misinformation
  • harmful ideologies
  • critical reading skills
  • credible sources
  • inherently good habit
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