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The table below shows local catches and imports of fresh fish into Perth, Australia for the years 2004 - 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows local catches and imports of fresh fish into Perth, Australia for the years 2004 - 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
#imports #fish #perth #australia #years #summarise #information #features #comparisons
The table depicts changes over
ten-year
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a ten-year
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period
 in local and imports of garden-fresh
fish
 into
perth
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Perth
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, Australia between 2004 and 2014.
Numbers
 are in metric tons.
Overall
, The country has
been
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caught
fish
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more fish
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 locally than imported every year from outside, it always
keep
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keeps
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 low in
numbers
 since
local
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the local
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 market
caught
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catches
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highest
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the highest
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consumable
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number of consumable
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fish
 every ten-year
period
. The highest metric tons in both categories
illustrated
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were illustrated
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separatelly
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separately
 as local and imported
fish
 in 2008 and 2012.
To begin
 with, most
numbers
 displayed in
local
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the local
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 market and it started
over
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at over
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 2500 metric tons in 2004, each year increased gradually until peaked at approximately 8100 in 2008. Afterwards, those
numbers
were
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decreased
through-out
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throughout
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rest
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the rest
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 of
years
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the years
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 and
it
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they
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 stood at over 5000 in 2014.
In contrast
,
import
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the import
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fish
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of fish
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 into
perth
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Perth
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 started
nearly
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at nearly
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 465 in 2004 and it
flactuated
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fluctuated
fluctuates
 over
next
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the next
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 four-year
period
.
Then
 it rose sharply
1104.1
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, 1203.7 in both 2009 and 2010.
This
 trend always varied and where imports reached
to
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the
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their
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 highest point of 1227.3 in 2012. In total
fish
 consumption data showed a significant rise until it peaked
over
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at over
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 8900 in 2009,
then
 it fell slightly over the rest of the
period
.
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