Some parents think that childcare centres provide the best services for children of preschool age. other working parents think that family members such as grandparents will be better carers for their kids. Discuss both views and give ur opinion

Nowadays, some
parents
believe that
childcare
centre is the best place for their babies since some think family members would be
a better carers
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.
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shows the
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opinions on
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childcare
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.
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these two
view
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is
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diffierent
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different
apparently, their nucleus are
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as the
parents
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care
about which is the best
childcare
method.
Firstly
, the reason why some
parents
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believe
the
childcare
centres could be a perfect service for preschool age is because they believe in the professions of the centre teachers. In case, those teachers were
the
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employed by the
center
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which means they have passed the
childcare
requiements
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requirements
and may have the related professional skills certificate,
such
as baby drawing and infant massage.
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,
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there will
be a lot of CCTV and staff to take
care
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the children in
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center
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.
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,
parents
could
spent
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their child to learn different
skill
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in a
safety
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place
for
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a
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on time even
they
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are busy
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their work.
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the other hand, some
parents
believe that family members would be a better childcarer since they have a closer relationship. These
parents
always doubted the centre
staffs
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since they
are
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strangers, so they may worry about
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educational value
of
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them
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For example
, some believe in harsh teaching but some believe in playing teaching.
This
made the
parents
worriy
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worried
about the
expeerience
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experience
experiences
of their child.
Therefore
, they will choose the grandparents to be the childcarer even
they
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if they
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are not professional cares. In conclusion,
the
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modern
parents
will
coose
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choose
close
the
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childcare
centres or
the
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grandparents to take
care
their
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cildren
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children
.
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the
result
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od
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carers
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not the same,
but
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both opinions
also
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to the
parents
's
care
of the children which like the safety
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and
child's
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the child's
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experience. All in all, these
both
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useful
way
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to take
care
with
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the children even which
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do
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the
parenet
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parent
parents
choose.
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task response
Ensure your essay clearly addresses all parts of the question. In this case, while you have discussed both views, your own opinion isn't clearly stated. Make sure to include a clear, concise opinion in your conclusion to fulfill the task completely.
coherence cohesion
Organize your paragraphs logically and ensure each paragraph has a clear central theme. Try to improve coherence by using linking words and phrases to connect ideas smoothly.
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Provide specific examples and detailed analysis to back up your points. Avoid broad generalizations and try to relate ideas directly to the topic.
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The essay presents both views on childcare, providing a balanced discussion.
coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are present and serve as bookends to your argument.
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You acknowledge the underlying similarity in both viewpoints, which adds depth to the discussion.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Childcare centres
  • Preschool age
  • Working parents
  • Carers
  • Structured environment
  • Socialisation
  • Early childhood education
  • Cognitive development
  • Motor skills
  • Emotional connection
  • Traditions
  • Continuity
  • Flexibility
  • Caregivers
  • Professional care
  • Family involvement
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