Some parents think that childcare centres provide the best services for children of preschool age. other working parents think that family members such as grandparents will be better carers for their kids. Discuss both views and give ur opinion
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task response
Ensure your essay clearly addresses all parts of the question. In this case, while you have discussed both views, your own opinion isn't clearly stated. Make sure to include a clear, concise opinion in your conclusion to fulfill the task completely.
coherence cohesion
Organize your paragraphs logically and ensure each paragraph has a clear central theme. Try to improve coherence by using linking words and phrases to connect ideas smoothly.
task response
Provide specific examples and detailed analysis to back up your points. Avoid broad generalizations and try to relate ideas directly to the topic.
task response
The essay presents both views on childcare, providing a balanced discussion.
coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are present and serve as bookends to your argument.
task response
You acknowledge the underlying similarity in both viewpoints, which adds depth to the discussion.
Your opinion
Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.
If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.
Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.
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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?