The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use.

The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use.
There are two different
chart
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in the study case of Australian
household
energy
use
and its
greenhouse
gas
emission
. Both of the charts are related
according to
the points inside the chart of
household
energy
use
and
the
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greenhouse
gas
emissions. From 100%, the biggest percentage of
household
energy
use
is heating
on
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40%, followed by water heating
30
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%, other appliances
15
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%, Refrigeration
7
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%, lighting
4
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%, and Cooling
2
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%. But why does the
household
energy
use
presentation are different if we compare it with the
greenhouse
gas
emissions? First of all, we need to know what is a mission a mission is some sort of
waste
that we produce from sort
of
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activities,
in
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this
context is
energy
waste
that
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produced from
the
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household
energy
usage that
turn
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into
greenhouse
gas
emission
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emissions
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. So each
gas
emission
from
the
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household
activities
are
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different
depend
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on what activities. As an example even
Refrigeration
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though Refrigeration
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only
share
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7% of
the
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household
energy
use
, it
share
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4% of the
greenhouse
gas
emission
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emissions
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because the
waste
that
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created
from
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Refrigeration
was
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bigger. It is the same case with
the
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other
household
energy
use
, some of them
has
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lower
waste
, and some of them
has
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 higher 
waste
.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
Vocabulary: Replace the words household, energy, use, greenhouse, gas, emission, waste with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Energy consumption
  • Greenhouse gas emissions
  • Sustainable practices
  • Energy efficiency
  • Renewable energy
  • Fossil fuels
  • Carbon footprint
  • Eco-friendly appliances
  • Insulation
  • Solar panels
  • Recycling
  • Climate change
  • Kilowatt-hour (kWh)
  • Emissions-intensive
  • Energy audit
  • Smart meters
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