The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use.

The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use.
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As seen in the first
chart
, which presents the percentage of the use of energy in
Australia
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Australian
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household
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households
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, other appliances
dominates
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dominate
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the
chart
with 24% followed by water heating, 23%.
While
in the third position is heating and cooling with 20%. The energy used for cooking and
stand by
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stand-by
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is 5%.
This
represents that it is mostly used for things related to
control
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controlling
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the atmospheric conditions in a household. Most
of
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apply
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the
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apply
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household uses energy to either help them cool the temperature of either the house or the water they are using or heat it up.
While
lighting with only 11% Meanwhile, in the second
chart
, it is seen that heating and cooling
dominates
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dominate
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the
chart
with 38%. Followed by water heating
with
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at
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25% and other appliances
with
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at
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16%.
While
lighting and refrigeration stand
with
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at
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the same
percetage
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percentage
, 7%. With stand-by as the least
percetage
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percentage
at the number of 3%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words chart with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stand" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Energy consumption
  • Greenhouse gas emissions
  • Sustainable practices
  • Energy efficiency
  • Renewable energy
  • Fossil fuels
  • Carbon footprint
  • Eco-friendly appliances
  • Insulation
  • Solar panels
  • Recycling
  • Climate change
  • Kilowatt-hour (kWh)
  • Emissions-intensive
  • Energy audit
  • Smart meters
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