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With recent developments in technology like e-books, some people feel that printed media like books, newspapers, and magazines will soon be a thing of the past. Others feel that these form of media will never disappear. What is your opinion?

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Recently, with the improvement that occurred especially in the
technology
 sector, some argue that
people
 in the future will not use traditional resources
such
 as printed
books
 and magazines because development of
technology
tools
,
while
 others believe that
people
 will still use them because it is very useful to improve your knowledge.
This
 essay completely agrees that traditional
tools
 like paper
books
 will disappear because
developments
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of developments
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 related to
technology
. On the one hand, in recent years the majority of young
people
 started using e-
books
 and online resources as the main
tools
 to get the
information
 they need.
Technology
 provides a variety of materials that make finding
information
 much easier and faster without wasting time in libraries or reading several
books
.
For instance
, a significant number of students nowadays use chat GPT or artificial intelligence as a main source to take
information
 or learn new skills
as
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English
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the English
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 language .
However
, the main essential benefit of
technology
 is free and wild knowledge. So, accessible knowledge and
information
 are now available and accessible to everyone without wasting money on limited sources.
For example
, Oxford’s e-
books
 are available for students with a small amount of money and each student can access more than 100
books
 and novels in order to learn the English language. In conclusion, developments in
technology
tools
 are very useful and accessible for
people
 which makes it more desirable than other printed
books
 and newspapers. I believe that we will not see these
tools
 in the future.
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clarity
Provide a clearer definition of which 'traditional tools' you mean in the introduction to set clear expectations.
development
Develop your ideas further with more detailed examples and explanations, particularly when discussing how technology advances contribute to the decline of printed media.
balance
Try to balance your argument by elaborating more on the points of view that argue for the continued relevance of printed media.
structure
You have a clear structure with an introduction, main body paragraphs, and conclusion.
clarity
The essay offers a concise statement of your opinion in the introduction, showing clear stance.
balance
You addressed both sides of the argument, showing consideration of various perspectives.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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  • e-books
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