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The chart below shows the percentage of people accessing news via different media in one country in 2013, 2015 and 2017. Summate the informa in te seeting and reporting the main features,

The chart below shows the percentage of people accessing news via different media in one country in 2013, 2015 and 2017. Summate the informa in te seeting and reporting the main features,
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The chart below shows the percentage of people accessing news via different media in
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 country in 2013, 2015 and 2017. The chart illustrates the percentage of people accessing news using different technologies or media in
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 country in 2013, 2015 and 2017.
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, the biggest fluctuation in percentages was in using the Newspapers and the Internet,
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 decreased marginally the second
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 increased considerably in
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, Television and radio had a slight decrease. Whilst, printed Newspapers had the biggest plunge going down from approximately 40 in 2013 to 20 in 2017, the
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 had grown significantly from approximately 30 in 2013 to almost 70 in 2017 respectively climbing as the second in the list.
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, there are two media that supported a slight decline. Television went down from almost 80 in 2013 to 70 in 2017.
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, radio has experienced a modest decline almost remaining the same starting from almost 35 in 2013 to 30 in 2015 and staying the same in the next year.
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