You rent an apartment. you want to tell your landlord that you are happy with the apartment in general, but there are some small repairs that need to be carried out. write a letter to your landlord. In your letter say what you like about the apartment , describe the repairs that need to be made and explain how the repairs will improve your quality of life.
Dear Alex,
I am so happy
while
I Correct word choice
that
rent
Wrong verb form
rented
a
your apartment. I found it difficult. Thank you for helping me Remove the article
apply
rent
a house
.
Your home its
a Replace the word
it's
it is
beatiful
view but Correct your spelling
beautiful
balcony
Correct article usage
the balcony
need
Correct subject-verb agreement
needs
a
regeneration because the ground is damaged.
In my opinion Correct article usage
apply
apartment
is Correct article usage
the apartment
a
old so sometimes I hear my Correct article usage
apply
neighbors
voices clearly. The sound insulation of the apartment needs to be renewed. Change noun form
neighbor's
neighbors'
Kitchen
is good but I Correct article usage
The kitchen
rent
a
all Correct article usage
apply
kıtchen
material Correct article usage
the kıtchen
while
rent
a Change the verb form
renting
house
. Kıtchen materials is
not good and Change the verb form
are
its
very old sometimes I use Replace the word
it's
it is
a
oven but Change the article
an
food
is Add an article
the food
buring
.
I know Correct your spelling
boring
this
house
not
new and Add a missing verb
is not
materials
Correct article usage
the materials
not
good and quality but if you want I can renew. I will send you Add a missing verb
are not
bill
and I miss the Correct article usage
the bill
rent
. Your house
will good
.
I am waiting for your return.
Add a missing verb
be good
King
regards.Correct your spelling
Kind
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Coherence & Cohesion
Consider organizing your points more clearly, perhaps by dedicating each paragraph to a specific topic, such as 'what you like about the apartment' and 'repairs needed'.
Task Achievement
Ensure that all necessary details are included to fully address the task, such as how the repairs will specifically improve your quality of life.
Coherence & Cohesion
The greeting and closing are appropriate and well-defined for a letter.
Task Achievement
The letter maintains a polite and respectful tone while addressing concerns, which is suitable for the context of writing to a landlord.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite