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The pie chart illustrates the primary global causes of land degradation, while the table highlights the main factors contributing to this issue by region in the 1990s. Overall, over-grazing was the leading cause of agricultural land degradation globally, with Europe being the most affected region. Looking more closely at the pie chart, over-grazing is clearly the main factor behind global land degradation, accounting for 35%. Deforestation follows at 30%, and over-cultivation contributes 28%. A small percentage is attributed to other causes. The table shows that Europe experienced the highest level of land degradation, with 23% of its land affected, primarily due to deforestation, which accounted for 9.8%. Oceania followed the global trend, with over-grazing as the leading cause of land degradation. Lastly, North America had the lowest percentage of land degradation, with only 5% of its land affected.

The pie chart illustrates the primary global causes of land degradation, while the table highlights the main factors contributing to this issue by region in the 1990s. Overall, over-grazing was the leading cause of agricultural land degradation globally, with Europe being the most affected region. Looking more closely at the pie chart, over-grazing is clearly the main factor behind global land degradation, accounting for 35%. Deforestation follows at 30%, and over-cultivation contributes 28%. A small percentage is attributed to other causes. The table shows that Europe experienced the highest level of land degradation, with 23% of its land affected, primarily due to deforestation, which accounted for 9.8%. Oceania followed the global trend, with over-grazing as the leading cause of land degradation. Lastly, North America had the lowest percentage of land degradation, with only 5% of its land affected.
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The pie chart illustrates the primary global causes of
land
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degradation
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while
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 the table highlights the main factors contributing to
this
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 issue by region in the 1990s.
Overall
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, over-grazing was the leading cause of agricultural
land
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degradation
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 globally, with Europe being the most affected region. Looking more closely at the pie chart, over-grazing is clearly the main factor behind global
land
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degradation
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, accounting for 35%. Deforestation follows at 30%, and over-cultivation contributes 28%. A small percentage is attributed to other causes. The table shows that Europe experienced the highest level of
land
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degradation
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, with 23% of its
land
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 affected, primarily
due to
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 deforestation, which accounted for 9.8%. Oceania followed the global trend, with over-grazing as the leading cause of
land
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degradation
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.
Lastly
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, North America had the lowest percentage of
land
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degradation
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, with only 5% of its
land
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 affected.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words land, degradation with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrates" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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