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The line graph below shows changes in the amount of coffee exported from three countries between 2002 and 2012

The line graph below shows changes in the amount of coffee exported from three countries between 2002 and 2012
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The line graph compares the number of
coffee
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 traded from three different countries,
Brazil
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, Colombia, and Costa Rica, from 2002 to 2012.
Overall
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, it can be seen that the amount of
coffee
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 sold in
Brazil
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 had an upward trend throughout the years. Regardless of some fluctuations, the remaining countries increased their export numbers by the end of the period. In 2002,
Brazil
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's total
export
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was
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 around 13
million
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kilograms
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 before rising to roughly 25
million
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kilograms
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 by 2015, despite its small decrease in 2010.
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 amount exhibited
Brazil
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 as the highest exporter from 2004 to 2012. In comparison, the number of
coffee
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export
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 in Costa Rica stood at 15
million
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kilograms
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 in 2010 and gradually fell to approximately 7
million
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kilograms
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 by 2006. It,
however
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, surged to almost 20
million
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kilograms
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 by the end of the period.
On the other hand
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, the international trade of Colombia's
coffee
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 was approximately 5
million
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kilograms
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 in 2002.
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 figure increased to nearly 11
million
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kilograms
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 by 2006 before dropping to just about 2
million
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kilograms
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 by 2008.
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, it sharply rose to about 15
million
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kilograms
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 by 2012.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, brazil, million, kilograms with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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